Scripts for Additional Shots

From the first draft of our trailer and taking into consideration the audience feedback from our trailer first draft, we decided to add more shots/scenes which also needed scripts. Here are the scripts we decided to use. These scripts, however, could be changed to suit the shot characters/actors better. Also, in the newer version of our trailer, these shots with dialogue will be edited down so that the punchiest, most effective parts of the speech are included to conform to the conventions of the thriller genre, in that the trailer needs to be edited quickly to try and keep the audience on edge

This is the script for the scene where the protagonist (Ryan) and protagonist’s wife (Frances) have a conversation over breakfast:

(Ryan and Frances are sitting at breakfast with coffee and toast, talking about their future)

Frances – “We need to talk”

Ryan – “Sure, what about?”

Frances – “I don’t want you doing heists anymore. I want to build a family with you”

Ryan – “but what about all the money we make?”

Frances – “I’m bored of money now!”

Ryan – “And do you know how hard it is to leave?”  

Frances – “No, and I don’t need to! Its either me or him, you choose!”

Continuing, this is the script for when the protagonist (Ryan) and antagonist (Luke) talk about the new heist/job:

(Ryan and Luke are talking)

Luke – “Mate, I’ve got a job for us”

Ryan – “My wife doesn’t want me to do heists anymore”

Luke – “What? Why?”

Ryan – “She wants us to build a family”

Luke – “Well, you can’t just leave crime!”

Ryan – “Watch me!”

(Ryan storms out)

Finally, this is the script for when the antagonist (Luke) and antagonist's boss (Ryan) discuss the situation they are in:

Myles – “You have no idea what you’ve got yourself into! Do you think this is acceptable?”

Luke – “No, but trust me, I’ll sort it”

Myles - "You’d better! Either pay me my money, or my ‘friends’ will be in touch!"

Film Trailer First Draft Audience Feedback

We have showed our trailer to our friends and other people that are members of our target audience and this post will state some of the feedback we have received on how to improve the trailer.

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These are the main improvements suggested through the questionnaire:

- Music in last scene doesn't fit

- Poor video quality

- Give more implication that there is crime involved

- Make transitions between scenes smoother

- Make the music overlap to remove unnatural pause/silence

- Perhaps have more action

- Maybe make the trailer quicker, with more fast paced editing

- Make the kidnapping stand out more

- Make sure voices can be heard

My Thoughts on our Trailer

- Add director name

- Make speech quicker, punchier and maybe make it play over action shots

- Add text transition slides, like endorsements

- Maybe increase the speed of some shots or the overall speed of the editing

- Dialogue may be too long
- Needs an age certification screen

Overall, there is still a lot of work that needs to be done on our trailer to make it as good as it can possibly be, hence why this was only a rough cut trailer. There are certain things that aren't so drastic that we can edit rather easily, like the volume of certain shots and different on-screen effects, like text etc. However, there are also certain things that will need to be massively overhauled, like the main plot of the story, in order to make the film trailer make sense and also fit the conventions of our chosen genre even more and make it clearer to the viewers.

Draft Film Trailer

Here is an early version of our trailer, there are still things we need to change and feedback that needs to be considered, so we decided to create a rough cut trailer to start with to give us an idea of what will need changing and whether certain parts of our trailer make sense.

BFI Exit Polls

How People Discover New films

There are a range of different ways that people can discover and find out about new films. Firstly, people could follow specific directors and actors and could follow what work they are involved in. If someone likes an actor or director from their previous films, it is likely they will like their new releases as well. Here are some infographics I have made regarding the BFI exit polls of different films of a similar genre to our film.

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Film Exhibition

Like the post and Prezi on film distribution, here is a Prezi I have made on film exhibition. Some of the things I have discussed are what film exhibition is, the history of the cinema and the increase in popularity of home-viewing.

Film Distibution

As a research task, I looked at how important film distribution and marketing is and what is the purpose of it.

Film Trailer Graphics

When editing our trailer, I decided to look at possible fonts we could use. I decided to research different thriller film trailers and see what font styles they used. Some film trailers that I looked at and liked the font style of were 'Kidnap', 'Split' and 'The Foreigner' and the pictures below are the font styles that were used. Both 'Split' and 'The Foreigner' have parts of the text distorted with lines going through it, something that we could try and incorporate into the text we will use in our film trailer.

I also looked at different fonts on various websites and found the following that we could potentially use.

The fonts I found on the websites were similar to the ones I saw in the film trailers. All the fonts I looked at were all eroded and had parts of the text worn away, shattered or distorted. Taking inspiration from these different font styles could benefit our film trailer and make it look more professional and could help it follow the conventions of the thriller genre better.